How Should I Transition Between My Hook And Thesis Statement In My Introduction?

1. Kirsten Says

   I think the hook is fine. You’ve done a good job with it. It will hit people on several levels, whether they are animal lovers or patriots. Everyone was affected by 9/11 and everyone loves a hero, especially one in fur.
   For the transition, how about something as simple as, “Now imagine if Dorado had been a cat instead of a dog.”
   For what it is worth, I’ve trained both cats and dogs. It isn’t really a question of one being smarter than the other but one being far more cooperative than the other. Dogs are naturally team players, while cats are naturally independent.
   “Dogs come when they’re called. Cats take a message and get back to you.”
   - Mary Bly
   Size is also an issue. Cats are ill-equipped to guide the blind, retrieve dropped items such as cans or bottles, or open heavy doors. Dogs come in a wide variety of sizes, but cats are pretty much all in the 10-ish pound range.
   The phrase “man’s best friend” is paraphrased from an 1870 speech given by Senator George Graham Vest who actually said, “The one absolute, unselfish friend that man can have in this selfish world — the one that never proves ungrateful or treacherous — is his dog.”
   The rest of the speech is compelling and may contain bits you’d like to use as quotes.http://www.sos.mo.gov/archives/education…
   For the full story: http://www.sos.mo.gov/archives/education…
   or the synopsis: http://www.almostheaven-golden-retriever…
   I don’t know if this is of any use to you, but on March 15, 2011, federal regulations changed so that one could no longer use a cat as a service animal, even supposing one could find a cooperative cat and train it. Prior to that date, there actually were service cats. And service rats. And service pigs. It got kind of ridiculous, which is why the regulations were changed and restricted to dogs. An exception is also permitted for miniature horses, and that’s it.http://servicedogcentral.org/content/nod…

2. Andrew Says

   What I would do is change the hook. What you wrote has nothing to do with dogs being better than cats, but if at the end you say something like “Had Eduardo been using a cat as a guide he would undoubtedly be very dead.” This also allows for a smoother transition since you can then say “This is why dogs are better than cats. They are intelligent enough to guide a man through a burning building, and loving enough to be great companions, but cats suck.” and so on.
   Also check your punctuation, it sucks.

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